Hector Dreams of Ballet
After seven years of torment, dreams of a day
free of arrows dot my memory.
Vast landscapes of beaches filled
by decay and dotted with spoltches
ruin cool evenings of entertainment.
The oldest strikes examples, while
Paris embraces forbidden pleasures.
Trading one stage for Pirouettes
would allow bounderies to fall.
Perhaps Achillies would join in for a Promenade.
I really struggled with this calisthenic for some reason, but I'm going to go back and rework it a little later on. I like this idea of Achillies and Hector locked in a ballet together.
You're right, Achilles and Hector locked in a ballet together sounds like grounds for a great poem. You could put them in modern times and really play around with scene and language. With what you have here I think you can mine these lines and amp them up a little bit to get some really useful language. For example, "Paris embraces forbidden pleasures," is pretty expected as far as word choice goes. What pleasures exactly? In detail? What if you use the ballet idea as framework for your piece and Paris is addicted to video games or his internet girlfriend or Twitter? What if Achilles and Hector are secret lovers? I just think it would be cool to set-up different scenerios for old myths to generate fresh ideas and language. Rethinking old characters is always a great writing exercise that can produce great work.
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